2008-2-1 06:17 PM
wen_wendy
仲有我十卜你呀^^
快d popo啦
新讀者^^十卜you^^
2008-2-1 08:23 PM
cinza1888
[粗口+口語+原創]永遠愛住你 ''第一次作,,''
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上集講到,,峰叫工人是但買d野,,比瑩食
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工人岩岩返黎
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峰[你買咩買咁耐ar?]
工人[我..我..我買左d小食]{驚比峰話佢}
峰[咁係咩小食ar??]
工人[燒...燒賣]{勁驚...}
峰[咩話??燒賣!!你有冇搞錯ar>?]
工人[對..對唔住ar!]
我[其實我好中意食燒賣!!]{講大話,,,唔係咁中意食}
峰[真?]
我[係ar,,,食得未ar]{笑住講<笑得好Ｑ>}
峰[食得...]{覺得瑩好q}
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食完
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我[話是話ar,,,點解屋企咁大??]
峰[下,,,,,唔知點講]
我[我好想訓ar!!]
峰[咁係咪訓囉!]
我[下,,呢到?]
峰[係ar!]
我[咁好na]
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瑩訓左
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峰不知不覺想啜淡瑩佢,,,因為瑩佢好q,,好令
峰一直望住瑩訓左,,,,2個訓係同一張床到..直到朝早,,,,
瑩[ar.........]{大叫}
峰[咩ar??]
峰[ar.......]
瑩[ar咩姐,,,人ar你又ar]
峰[點解我同你訓係同一張床???>]
瑩[點知姐,,,]
峰[唉....咁算na]
瑩[下,,,算??<]
峰[咁你想點ar?]
瑩[咁我點知你有冇咩我架?]
峰[冇ar,,要女,,我大把na!]
瑩[好叻咩?我冇仔ar?]
峰[好...我中意你有性格!!!]
瑩[使乜你中意ar?,,,嬲死你]
峰[咁點先唔嬲ar?]
瑩[咁知姐,,,,]
峰[咁啜淡算!]
瑩都未講野,,峰佢就啜左,,,,呢個係瑩的初吻!
瑩[妖,,仆街,,,仲咩啜人姐!!]
峰[又唔係初吻!!]
瑩[呢個係我初吻黎架!!]
峰[咁你想我點ar?]
瑩[還返比我!!]
峰[係你叫架咋,,,,]{想再啜..}
瑩[Stop,,,唔係啜我,,,係請我食m記]
峰[m記咋??]
瑩[咁諗到話比你知...]
峰[又好姐!]
瑩[ar............]
峰[今次又點ar?]
瑩[屌,,,,今次夠鍾na!!]
峰[咁仲唔快d!!]
瑩[得na@!]
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作d算,,都唔回會有人回我na!!
2008-2-1 09:36 PM
☆小婷★
好好睇呀,
快dpost呀,
我回你呀,
thx~
2008-2-2 08:17 AM
cinza1888
回復 #23 ☆小婷★ 的帖子
得你一個看,,,我作下去,,仲有咩意思ar!!
2008-2-2 11:52 AM
wen_wendy
仲有我十卜你呀嘛^^
有d人睇左唔回架..好賤囉
不過我唔係^^我岩岩睇完..好好喎
十卜你呀^^快d popo啦
2008-2-2 03:27 PM
＊小豬＊
幾好呀...唔錯唔錯
有待改善,可以再長d,
d角色重可以串d
2008-2-2 07:44 PM
cinza1888
回復 #26 ＊小豬＊ 的帖子
多謝你的意見,,我會改善一下
2008-2-2 07:46 PM
cinza1888
回復 #25 wen_wendy 的帖子
係ar$,,d人好衰ar,,看完又唔回,,如果你做作果個人都會好唔開心na!:s4U42I9:
2008-2-2 08:05 PM
cinza1888
[粗口+口語+原創]永遠愛住你 ''第一次作,,''
好多謝某d人回我,,但如果今次小人回的話,,我便唔會再作!!(作dd,,看看有冇cm仔)
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上集講到,,,,,佢地訓醒之後,,知道大家係同一張床到訓,,好驚,,但後來知道點解....................要上堂na~~
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課室~
玲[8婆瑩到na!]
文[好煩ar你,,人地係8婆咁你係咩ar??好笑...]{嬲}
玲[超,,,好叻咩,,,]{姣}
文[姣婆真係姣婆,,,,,,,]
玲[憎死你ar]{哭+走左}
文[好ar,,,憎我??多謝你ar!]
瑩[多謝我ar!]
文[唔洗,,我應該架!]
瑩[但係我....]
文[我明架na]
文[好好地珍惜瑩佢,,佢係好女仔黎架]{係峰耳仔同峰佢+好細聲}
峰[我知,,一定會,,你放心!]
瑩[你地係到講d咩ar?]
峰+文[冇ar,,,冇咩野呀!!]
瑩[又會咁合拍]
峰[心諗:其實,,ar瑩我真係好中意你,,我會好驚你會比人搶左去,,,但,,你個心有冇我!!]
打鍾
峰[返去個位到na!]
瑩[咪返囉,,,煩]
峰[好ar,,話我煩??唔理你!!衰人]{扮嬲}
瑩[唔好嬲na]{好q}
峰[超....]
瑩[屌....咁點先唔嬲嬲ar?]
峰[5.........做我條女!!]
瑩[下,,唔好玩na!]
峰[我唔係玩架!!我對你係真]
瑩[你......]
峰[好na!!!]
瑩[咁比3個星期你na,,]
峰[3個星期咋?]
瑩[咁一日囉,,,]
峰[唔好na,,,]
瑩[咁上堂na!]
瑩[心諗:其實我都好中意你,,,但你會唔會玩下我咋!?我好驚有一日你會同我分手ar]
唔po na,,都冇cm架na!
2008-2-2 08:48 PM
wen_wendy
有呀有呀
十卜你呀^^
快 d popo啦
2008-2-2 09:54 PM
cinza1888
回復 #30 wen_wendy 的帖子
下,,得你一個,,我作得咁辛苦,,,,,,,
2008-2-2 10:22 PM
笨小LeNG
好好'' 睇丫''
cm for ＹＯＵ
快D P0埋落去啦' 好想睇丫
2008-2-3 12:58 PM
wen_wendy
可能係d人睇左唔回姐..大家睇完要回呀^^
十卜ｕ^^
十卜十卜^^快d popo啦
2008-2-4 07:55 PM
cinza1888
回復 #33 wen_wendy 的帖子
真係冇人回我ar,,唔係要我唔做ma??
2008-2-4 08:05 PM
牙Ｂ
唔好咁LA,,
好好睇呀,,
CM 4 U
2008-2-4 08:48 PM
cinza1888
回復 #35 牙Ｂ 的帖子
我唔係唔想打,,再咁下去,,我打來也冇意思,,
2008-2-4 08:49 PM
cinza1888
我聽日,,打多dd看下有冇回復
[[i] 本帖最後由 cinza1888 於 2008-2-4 08:52 PM 編輯 [/i]]
2008-2-6 07:25 PM
牙Ｂ
回復 #36 cinza1888 的帖子
咩冇意思呀,,好有意思嫁~~~起碼我一定會睇
2008-2-6 08:39 PM
wen_wendy
喂..你又話會作多dd既..而家dddddd都冇呀..呃人既你
sor..激動得濟..咁你依家仲作唔作呀??@@
2008-2-6 08:39 PM
wen_wendy
好多人都等緊你po架